T2+Narrate

[|T2 Narrative Writing]

__Monday 27 June__ It was getting dark quickly. We were in the back seat of the second car. There were a car, our car and the troop carrier. The car was traveling at ruffly 120 kmph through bush land. Our car came to a sudden stop outside a toll booth. You do not have permission to go past here said the man in the booth. So the man in the car in front of us pulled out his silenced pistol, thick, thick, the man slumped to the ground with to bullet wounds in the head. On his way down he knocked the button and the gate went up.

Next thing you new there was a siren blaring. We better hurry if we are to get to the other side. Fearfully the car in front just blew up, bits of glass popped a tyre at the front which made driving hard. Me and my mate that was on my team in the back with me had to use the AK47s to try to kill the men that were shooting at us from the scrub and while this was happening the car was swerving across the road. The man riding shotgun was having a hard time keeping his gun straight so in the end I pulled out a mini gun and started shooting out the window at the men hiding in the scrub that were shooting at us.

Rounding a bend I herd a big bang it had been an RPG which had hit just behind our car lifting up the back tires and grinding the front of the car on the ground. We were losing the fight with the car. Next thing we new we were on the ground half a km away from our exit point with bits of our car and flame all around us. I slowly crawled into the scrub just to find a guy lying there with his gun aiming at the troop carrier so I crawled to him pulled out my knife and killed him I now had blood pooling around me like rain on the footpath of a rainy day, so I quickly grabbed his gun and started the long crawl to the exit point.

Crawling along I saw a team mate with a man standing over him with a gun pointing at his head so I quickly got the gun I had taken and aimed at the man’s head a second later the man was on his back dead, luckily for my team mate. I carried on crawling and I came along another man with his pistol aimed in my direction so I quickly hid behind some bush. Pulling out my silenced pistol and shot him in his head and just below the neck. Moving away I saw a man running up behind me as got in touching distance there was a flash of silver and he slumped to the ground dead. He had a knife in one hand and a grenade in the other he must have been chasing someone else when I had killed him.

Stumbling to the exit point I noticed that the troop carrier had been blown up by some grenades and I could see no survivors. Quickly stumbling on as I was nearing the exit point I also noticed that some of the men were grabbing guns from there own troop carriers and heading into the bushes. This was my chance I bolted for the trucks as I arrived I quickly jumped into the back of there troop carrier and grabbed what ever supplies I could get. Deciding the best way to get past would be to steel a uniform off someone then take the truck up to the exit point.

On my way to find someone to steel from I found a team mate in the bushes. I acted as if I hadn’t seen him and walked on to find a man hiding in the truck cab. I then put a cloth over his mouth and took his clothes off him and slipped into them. I then tied his arms and legs together and threw him into the bushes where I thought no one would find him. I then took the truck and started off at a slow pace of 60 kmph I soon brought it up to 100, as I was cruising I saw a hole lot of people shooting at me there were bullets punching Through the metal destroying every thing in the back of the truck. Puncturing my tires and making me lose control, as I lost control I quickly jumped out the cab door and did a commando roll so I didn’t get ground shock or hurt.

The truck blew up when someone threw a bomb in the back of the truck so blew at the precise time. I saw I was 100 metres from the exit point so I put the gun on my back took a sprinting stance, and I was of I got the in 12 seconds on the button. When I was at the exit point I saw that it was a military base. So I carefully went in gun raised and ready I went into the control room and saw my commander. How did I do I asked? Your in he said. That was a good drill next time try not to kill anyone okay.

__Friday 24 June__

It was getting dark quickly. We were in the back seat of the second car. There were a car, our car and the troop carrier. The car was traveling at ruffly 120 kmph through bush land. Our car came to a sudden stop outside a toll booth. You do not have permission to go past here said the man in the booth. So the man in the car in front of us pulled out his silenced pistol, thick, thick, the man slumped to the ground with to bullet wounds in the head. On his way down he knocked the button and the gate went up.

Next thing you new there was a siren blaring. We better hurry if we are to get to the other side. Fearfully the car in front just blew up, bits of glass popped a tyre at the front which made driving hard. Me and my mate that was on my team in the back with me had to use the AK47s to try to kill the men that were shooting at us from the scrub and while this was happening the car was swerving across the road. The man riding shotgun was having a hard time keeping his gun straight so in the end I pulled out a mini gun and started shooting out the window at the men hiding in the scrub that were shooting at us.

Rounding a bend I herd a big bang it had been an RPG which had hit just behind our car lifting up the back tires and grinding the front of the car on the ground. We were losing the fight with the car. Next thing we new we were on the ground half a km away from our exit point with bits of our car and flame all around us. I slowly crawled into the scrub just to find a guy lying there with his gun aiming at the troop carrier so I crawled to him pulled out my knife and killed him I now had blood pooling around me like rain on the footpath of a rainy day, so I quickly grabbed his gun and started the long crawl to the exit point.

Crawling along I saw a team mate with a man standing over him with a gun pointing at his head so I quickly got the gun I had taken and aimed at the man’s head a second later the man was on his back dead, luckily for my team mate. I carried on crawling and I came along another man with his pistol aimed in my direction so I quickly hid behind some bush. Pulling out my silenced pistol and shot him in his head and just below the neck. Moving away I saw a man running up behind me as got in touching distance there was a flash of silver and he slumped to the ground dead. He had a knife in one hand and a grenade in the other he must have been chasing someone else when I had killed him.

Stumbling to the exit point I noticed that the troop carrier had been blown up by some grenades and I could see no survivors. Quickly stumbling on as I was nearing the exit point I also noticed that some of the men were grabbing guns from there own troop carriers and heading into the bushes. This was my chance I bolted for the trucks as I arrived I quickly jumped into the back of there troop carrier and grabbed what ever supplies I could get. Deciding the best way to get past would be to steel a uniform off someone then take the truck up to the exit point.

On my way to find someone to steel from I found a team mate in the bushes. I acted as if I hadn’t seen him and walked on to find a man hiding in the truck cab. I then put a cloth over his mouth and took his clothes off him and slipped into them. I then tied his arms and legs together and threw him into the bushes where I thought no one would find him. I then took the truck and started off at a slow pace of 60 kmph I soon brought it up to 100, as I was cruising I saw a hole lot of people shooting at me there were bullets punching Through the metal destroying every thing in the back of the truck. Puncturing my tires and making me lose control, as I lost control I quickly jumped out the cab door and did a commando roll so I didn’t get ground shock or hurt.

The truck blew up when someone threw a bomb in the back of the truck so blew at the precise time. I saw I was 100 metres from the exit point so I put the gun on my back took a sprinting stance, and I was of I got the in 12 seconds on the button. When I was at the exit point I saw that it was a military base. So I carefully went in gun raised and ready I went into the control room and saw my commander. How did I do I asked? Your in he said. That was a good drill next time try not to kill anyone okay.

__Friday 24 June__ **Comment: Great action story! a little bit scary for me :+) Events are sequenced well, hope I'm not in your drill team I might wake up dead!**   **High Level 3**   **Target - Next Steps**   **1. Use some precise verbs for impact to describe actions or to capture thoughts e.g "I now had blood pooling around me like puddles on the footpath during a rain storm"**   **2. Use a variety of sentence beginnings and length for effect e.g. Fearfully the car in ... Rounding the bend we ... Crawling into the scrub**  It was getting dark quickly. We were in the back seat of the second car. There were a car, our car and the troop carrier. The car was traveling at ruffly 120 kmph through bush land. Our car came to a sudden stop outside a toll booth. You do not have permission to go past here said the man in the booth. So the man in the car in front of us pulled out his silenced pistol, thick, thick, the man slumped to the ground with to bullet wounds in the head. On his way down he knocked the button and the gate went up.

Next thing you new there was a siren blaring. We better hurry if we are to get to the other side. The next thing that happened was fearful the car in front just blew up bits of glass popped a tyre at the front which made driving hard. Me and the other guy in the back had to use the AK47s to try to kill the men shooting at them and while this was happening the car was swerving across the road. And the man that was riding shotgun was having a hard time keeping his gun straight so in the end I pulled out an anti air craft gun and started shooting out the window at the men hiding in the scrub that were shooting at me.

As we were going round a bend i herd a big bang it had been an RPG which had hit just behind our car lifting up the back tires and grinding the front of the car on the ground. We were losing the fight with the car. Next thing we new we were on the ground half a km away from our exit point with bits of our car and flame all around us. I slowly crawled into the scrub just to find a guy lying there with his aiming at the troop carrier so I crawled to him pulled out my knife and killed him I now had blood pooling around me so I I quickly grabbed his gun and started the long crawl to the exit point.

As I was crawling I saw a team mate with a man standing over him with a gun pointing at his head so I quickly got the gun I had taken and aimed at the man’s head a second later the man was on his back dead, luckily for my team mate. I carried on crawling and I came along another man with his pistol aimed in my direction so I quickly hid behind some bush. I pulled out my silenced pistol and shot him in his head and just below the neck. As I was moving away I saw a man running up behind me as got in touching distance there was a flash of silver and he slumped to the ground dead. He had a knife in one hand and a grenade in the other he must have been chasing someone else when I had killed him.

Stumbling to the exit point I noticed that the troop carrier had been blown up by some grenades and I could see no survivors. So I quickly stumbled on as I was nearing the exit point I also noticed that some of the men were grabbing guns from there own troop carriers and heading into the bushes. This was my chance I bolted for the trucks as I arrived I quickly jumped into the back of there troop carrier and grabbed what ever supplies I could get. I decided the best way to get past would be to steel a uniform off someone then take the truck up to the exit point.

On my way to find someone to steel from I found a team mate in the bushes. I acted as if I hadn’t seen him and walked on to find a man hiding in the truck cab. I then put a cloth over his mouth and took his clothes I then tied his arms and legs together and threw him into the bushes where he thought no one would find him he then took the truck and started off at a slow pace of 60 kmph I soon brought it up to 100, as I was cruising I saw a hole lot of people shooting at me there were bullet punching Through the metal destroying every thing in the back of the truck. Also puncturing my tires and making me lose control, as I lost control I quickly jumped out the cab door and did a commando roll so I didn’t get ground shock or hurt.

The truck blew up when someone threw a bomb in the back of the truck so blew at the precise time. I saw I was 100 metres from the exit point so I put the gun on my back took a sprinting stance, and I was of I got the in 12 seconds on the button. When I was at the exit point I saw that it was a military base. So I carefully went in gun raised and ready I went into the control room and saw my commander. How did I do I asked? Your in he said. That was a good drill next time try not to kill anyone okay.

__Thursday 23 June__ It was getting dark quickly. We were in the back seat of the second car. There were a car, our car and the troop carrier. The car was traveling at ruffly 120 kmph through bush land. Our car came to a sudden stop outside a toll booth. You do not have permission to go past here said the man in the booth. So the man in the car in front of us pulled out his silenced pistol, thick, thick, the man slumped to the ground with to bullet wounds in the head. On his way down he knocked the button and the gate went up.

Next thing you new there was a siren blaring. We better hurry if we are to get to the other side. The next thing that happened was fearful the car in front just blew up bits of glass popped a tyre at the front which made driving hard. Me and the other guy in the back had to use the AK47s to try to kill the men shooting at them and while this was happening the car was swerving across the road. And the man that was riding shotgun was having a hard time keeping his gun straight so in the end I pulled out an anti air craft gun and started shooting out the window at the men hiding in the scrub that were shooting at me.

As we were going round a bend i herd a big bang it had been an RPG which had hit just behind our car lifting up the back tires and grinding the front of the car on the ground. We were losing the fight with the car. Next thing we new we were on the ground half a km away from our exit point with bits of our car and flame all around us. I slowly crawled into the scrub just to find a guy lying there with his aiming at the troop carrier so I crawled to him pulled out my knife and killed him I now had blood pooling around me so I I quickly grabbed his gun and started the long crawl to the exit point.

As I was crawling I saw a team mate with a man standing over him with a gun pointing at his head so I quickly got the gun I had taken and aimed at the man’s head a second later the man was on his back dead, luckily for my team mate. I carried on crawling and I came along another man with his pistol aimed in my direction so I quickly hid behind some bush. I pulled out my silenced pistol and shot him in his head and just below the neck. As I was moving away I saw a man running up behind me as got in touching distance there was a flash of silver and he slumped to the ground dead. He had a knife in one hand and a grenade in the other he must have been chasing someone else when I had killed him.

Stumbling to the the exit point I noticed that the troop carrier had been blown up by some grenades and I could see no survivors. So I quickly stumbled on as I was nearing the exit point I also noticed that some of the men were grabbing guns and heading into the bushes. This was my chance I bolted for the trucks as I arrived I quickly jumped into the back of there troop carrier and grabbed what ever supplies I could get. I decided the best way to get past would be to steel a uniform off someone then take the truck up to the exit point.

On my way to find someone to steel from I found a team mate in the bushes. I acted as if I hadn’t seen him and walked on to find a man hiding in the truck cab. I then put a cloth over his mouth and took his clothes I then tied his arms and legs together and threw him into the bushes where he thought no one would find him he then took the truck and started off at a slow pace of 60 kmph he soon brought it up to 100, as he was cruising he saw a hole lot of people shooting at him.

__Wednesday 22 June__ It was getting dark quickly. We were in the back seat of the second car. There were a car, our car and the troop carrier. The car was traveling at ruffly 120 kmph through bush land. Our car came to a sudden stop outside a toll booth. You do not have permission to go past here said the man in the booth. So the man in the car in front of us pulled out his pistol, thick, thick, the man slumped to the ground with to bullet wounds in the head. On his way down he knocked the button and the gate went up.

Next thing you new there was a siren blaring. We better hurry if we are to get to the other side. The next thing that happened was fearful the car in front just blew up bits of glass popped a tyre at the front which made driving hard. Me and the other guy in the back had to use the AK47s to try to kill the men shooting at them and while this was happening the car was swerving across the road. And the man that was riding shotgun was having a hard time keeping his gun straight so in the end I pulled out an anti air craft gun and started shooting out the window at the men hiding in the scrub that were shooting at me.

As we were going round a bend i herd a big bang it had been an RPG which had hit just behind our car lifting up the back tires and grinding the front of the car on the ground. We were losing the fight with the car. Next thing we new we were on the ground half a km away from our exit point with bits of our car and flame all around us. I slowly crawled into the scrub just to find a guy lying there with his aiming at the troop carrier so I crawled to him pulled out my knife and killed him I now had blood pooling around me so I I quickly grabbed his gun and started the long crawl to the exit point.

As I was crawling I saw a team mate with a man standing over him with a gun pointing at his head so I quickly got the gun I had taken and aimed at the man’s head a second later the man was on his back dead, luckily for my team mate.

__Thursday 16 June__ __After__ Before

__Friday 10 June__

Anger

Anger wears a full black outfit as black as the night sky for every day of the week of. Hurting people is all he knows and leaves his mark is what he will do, the black mark. Leaving as quick as he had come, he will leave without a trace apart from his mark. He will leave a mark, you will see it on the side of your face, his mark and then you will know who did it, it would have been HIM. His house is as black as his clothes so he can easily hide if his arch enemy “love” tried to attack him. Anger has only one friend excitement who will often meat with Anger at a local hunting spot to have some fun.

__Friday 10 June__

Anger

Anger wears a full black outfit as black as the night sky for every day of the week of year. Hurting people is all he knows and leaves his mark is what he will do, the black mark. Leaving as quick as he had come, he will leave without a trace apart from his mark. He will leave a mark, you will see it on the side of your face, his mark and know who did it, it would have been HIM. His house is as black as his clothes so he can easily hide if his arch enemy “love” tried to attack him.Anger has only one friend excitement who will often meat with anger at a local hunting spot to help anger have some fun.